Icarus Beach: a teaser
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Icarus Beach: a teaser
As Kazo plummeted towards the heart of the doomed star, she thought of what Apilak had told her:
Love, Apilak had said, is no more eternal than the stars. It may burn slow and steady for a long time and then gradually shrink away, or it may burn bright and hot for a brief period, only to end spectacularly.
Like a supernova? Kazo had said, her voice sharp with sarcasm.
Apilak laughed. Of course! And then Apilak added softly, But those are cynical words. We live in the light of ephemeral suns, Kazo. We all need that light.
Now, falling, Kazo felt only darkness.
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In the dark of her cabin, when Majnu had touched her, Kazo had felt the searing heat of desire; the dark swirled around their bodies, but inside, beneath her skin, in her lungs and her thighs and her head, heat and light roared and filled her.
They met shortly before the supernova, in preparation for the rare tarindhu celebration of rebirth. Once or twice a century, when a massive star ripens to death, a few hundred thousand of the galaxy’s most devoted, superrich tarindhus gather to witness the explosion that destroys the star while simultaneously reseeding the starlanes with heavy elements. Of those devotees, maybe a thousand will descend into the heart of the star and ride the shock wave. A third perish, the most honored of deaths. And to survive—survival heralds the rise of a family’s fortunes, both material and spiritual.
Although she had never been through a supernova, Nagaan Kazo had had many adventures in her young life. The Nagaan family—Kazo, her older sister Kumko, and their mother Haisho—worked as guides aboard the starcraft Umialik, hired by the superrich to tour extreme environments of the galaxy.
Apilak, the owner and captain of the Umialik, was a genius at spinning knotted anomalies into brane-shifted blisters, best in all the galaxy. She never lacked customers.
When word spread that the star Maishaitan was nearly ripe, Apilak put the services of her ship out to bid. She won a contract with old Samraatju Rajraan, to carry him and his third brood of children to the supernova. The Samraatju owned a flock of moons that manufactured knotted anomalies. Apilak’s price: sufficient knotted anomalies to fling the Umialik across the galaxy and back a hundred times.
Nagaan Haisho, Kazo’s mother, did not reveal her price.
Love, Apilak had said, is no more eternal than the stars. It may burn slow and steady for a long time and then gradually shrink away, or it may burn bright and hot for a brief period, only to end spectacularly.
Like a supernova? Kazo had said, her voice sharp with sarcasm.
Apilak laughed. Of course! And then Apilak added softly, But those are cynical words. We live in the light of ephemeral suns, Kazo. We all need that light.
Now, falling, Kazo felt only darkness.
#
In the dark of her cabin, when Majnu had touched her, Kazo had felt the searing heat of desire; the dark swirled around their bodies, but inside, beneath her skin, in her lungs and her thighs and her head, heat and light roared and filled her.
They met shortly before the supernova, in preparation for the rare tarindhu celebration of rebirth. Once or twice a century, when a massive star ripens to death, a few hundred thousand of the galaxy’s most devoted, superrich tarindhus gather to witness the explosion that destroys the star while simultaneously reseeding the starlanes with heavy elements. Of those devotees, maybe a thousand will descend into the heart of the star and ride the shock wave. A third perish, the most honored of deaths. And to survive—survival heralds the rise of a family’s fortunes, both material and spiritual.
Although she had never been through a supernova, Nagaan Kazo had had many adventures in her young life. The Nagaan family—Kazo, her older sister Kumko, and their mother Haisho—worked as guides aboard the starcraft Umialik, hired by the superrich to tour extreme environments of the galaxy.
Apilak, the owner and captain of the Umialik, was a genius at spinning knotted anomalies into brane-shifted blisters, best in all the galaxy. She never lacked customers.
When word spread that the star Maishaitan was nearly ripe, Apilak put the services of her ship out to bid. She won a contract with old Samraatju Rajraan, to carry him and his third brood of children to the supernova. The Samraatju owned a flock of moons that manufactured knotted anomalies. Apilak’s price: sufficient knotted anomalies to fling the Umialik across the galaxy and back a hundred times.
Nagaan Haisho, Kazo’s mother, did not reveal her price.
"Results! Why, man, I have gotten a lot of results. I know several thousand things that won't work." --Thomas A. Edison
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The neatest thing about this teaser is how much is conveyed so quickly -- exotic settings (supernovae, branes), distinct characters, cultural customs (the bidding and price of services, the nova surfing ritual). I like the attention to both small details (Umialik, like umiak...) and the elegiac tone of the opening.
I considered Icarus Beach a work of original imagination when I first read it. Going over the story's beginning once again, I still feel the excitement of that first reading.
I considered Icarus Beach a work of original imagination when I first read it. Going over the story's beginning once again, I still feel the excitement of that first reading.
For I come from an ardent race
That has subsisted on defiance and visions.
That has subsisted on defiance and visions.
Athena, you're very kind.Windwalker wrote:I considered Icarus Beach a work of original imagination when I first read it. Going over the story's beginning once again, I still feel the excitement of that first reading.
I don't know if this helps anyone, but I started writing this story twenty years ago, when I was in graduate school. Sometimes it just takes a long time to get a story right.
The two biggest hurdles I faced over the years were (a) the "technical" details of how one could surf a supernova and (b) the main conflict in the story. The recent idea of "brane" physics gave me a mechanism for surviving a supernova (for coherence, this also gave me my star drive); I found a suitable conflict by adapting (this won't spoil anything) the storyline from Romeo and Juliet.
What I learned in writing this story:
It is always important to have a strong emotional thread to a story. In this case, the Romeo & Juliet storyline provided the emotional backbone to the story.
I also learned that brash, vibrant characters make a story more alive. That may seem obvious, but too often I had been writing passive, quiet characters. And the stories were boring. I also think the main character Kazo (named after a Japanese pen pal, Kazuyo, I had in third grade) was influenced by watching anime films by Miyazake, who tends to have bright, resourceful, and outspoken girls as protagonists.
Finally, in inventing a "technology" for a science fiction story, it is also useful to have some metaphorical echo relevant to the story. Although I do not comment textually on it in the story, the "brane" technology literally isolates the characters from the "normal" world in a bubble-like enclosure, which echoes the characters' feeling of emotional isolation and being trapped.
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Brilliant, rich and utterly arresting!
In only the space of a few papagraphs, you've crafted the background of several three-dimensional characters and offered highly convincing glimpses of their lives, who they are and the ways in which they interact. More than that, you present a look at a multi-faceted, completely original universe that engages the imagination on more than one level. The brevity of the introduction shared here somehow makes it all the more effective, even as it draws the reader in and sparks a desire to know more.
In particular, the details presented about Kazo carry the sense that she has come a great distance (in the metaphorical sense along with the obvious physical), yet is still just beginning all at once. That, and the other aspects combined make this work truly exciting.
Heather
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In particular, the details presented about Kazo carry the sense that she has come a great distance (in the metaphorical sense along with the obvious physical), yet is still just beginning all at once. That, and the other aspects combined make this work truly exciting.
Heather
Woo hoo! I just got the issue. The cover art is pretty nice. At least, it's tasteful. Not 100% accurate, but it nicely captures the spirit of the work.
I'll add a link to Analog as soon as they post the cover art. (In a few days.)
I'll add a link to Analog as soon as they post the cover art. (In a few days.)
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It's here!
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Not bad at all! Though it's so small on the web page that I cannot distinguish the features of the people. But they did capture the concept.caliban wrote:Plus the cover!!
For I come from an ardent race
That has subsisted on defiance and visions.
That has subsisted on defiance and visions.
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good reviews
"Icarus Beach" has garnered some good reviews. Most important to me is Gardner Dozois saying he almost included it in his Year's Best Science Fiction anthology:![Smile :)](./images/smilies/icon_smile.gif)
For me that's very high praise and something I'm very happy with.If I'd had just a little more room, I would have used "Icarus Beach," which struck me as the best story in ANALOG this year.
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More good news: Locus magazine's 2007 recommended reading list includes "Icarus Beach." Only two stories out of Analog last year made it.
Woo-hoo!
Now I gotta finish those other stories and send them out.
Woo-hoo!
Now I gotta finish those other stories and send them out.
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